2016高考英語滿分作文及點評(大全)

　　寫作不僅考查考生遣詞造句的基本功，還考查考生書面思想表達(dá)、材料組織和結(jié)構(gòu)安排的邏輯判斷與推理能力。以下是百分網(wǎng)小編搜索整理的關(guān)于2016高考英語滿分作文及點評(大全)，供參考閱讀，希望對大家有所幫助!想了解更多相關(guān)信息請持續(xù)關(guān)注我們應(yīng)屆畢業(yè)生考試網(wǎng)!

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　　假定你是李華，正在英國接受英語培訓(xùn)，住在一戶英國人家里。今天你的房東Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你準(zhǔn)備外出，請給Mrs. Wilson 寫一留言條，內(nèi)容包括：

　　1.外出購物

　　2.替房東還書

　　3.Tracy 來電話留言：

　　1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)見面取消

　　2)此事已告知Susan

　　3) 盡快回電

　　注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右;2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Mrs. Wilson,

　　I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　【名師點評】

　　本文屬于提綱式要點作文，是學(xué)生比較熟悉的題材，體現(xiàn)了英語學(xué)習(xí)應(yīng)該注意實用性，生活型的原則。行文人稱、時態(tài)運用恰當(dāng)、準(zhǔn)確，各個要點間邏輯連貫，行文通順。提綱類書面表達(dá)不是簡單的逐條翻譯，而是將所給的幾個要點合理的組成比較通順的語句，因此要仔細(xì)組織語言，合理安排結(jié)構(gòu)。在語言方面，要特別注意簡潔明了，開頭要開門見山。

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　　情景作文：假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班的學(xué)生李華，為響應(yīng)綠化祖國的號召，你班四月十二日去郊區(qū)植樹，請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，介紹植樹活動的全過程，給某英文雜志的“綠色行動”專欄寫一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”為題的英文稿件。

　　注意：詞數(shù)不少于60 提示詞：郊區(qū)suburbs

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　　April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.

　　【名師點評】

　　本文是設(shè)計巧妙的提綱要點式作文，與環(huán)保結(jié)合，立意較好。文章思路清晰，要點連貫，在語言的表達(dá)上選詞新穎，同時運用了分詞短語作狀語等較好的句式表達(dá)。

　　以上就是小編帶來的2016高考英語滿分作文范文及名師點評(一)的詳細(xì)內(nèi)容，希望對您有所幫助。祝愿同學(xué)們都能取得好成績。更多精彩內(nèi)容，敬請掃描下方二維碼，關(guān)注愛教網(wǎng)高考寶典。

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　　Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

　　The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

　　We were tired but happy.

　　【名師點評】

　　本情景作文的內(nèi)容要點如下：1.討論;2.爬山;3.檢拾別人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。

　　內(nèi)容要點可用不同方式表達(dá)。本文覆蓋了所有內(nèi)容要點，較好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。其中，寫作主題突出，詳略得當(dāng)，應(yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，而且有效的使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文機構(gòu)緊湊。本文敘述清楚，描寫細(xì)致，準(zhǔn)確運用了很多富有表現(xiàn)力的詞和句型，例如：“set off early”，“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等，將活動的情形很形象地描述了出來。

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　　好詞：

　　1 set off 出發(fā)2. litter n.廢棄物3.respectively adv.分別地

　　好句：

　　1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

　　在爬山時，我們享受著溫暖的陽光和美麗的風(fēng)景。

　　2. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

　　然而，當(dāng)我們登上山頂，被眼前的一幕驚呆了：瓶子和香蕉皮這樣的廢棄物到處都是。

　　評析：細(xì)節(jié)描寫，生動形象。“shock”一詞也用得生動傳神。

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　　鼠標(biāo)是計算機時代最佳的人機交互工具之一。它極大地方便了人們的計算機操作。但是，過分依賴鼠標(biāo)的習(xí)慣也會帶來一些不利影響。請你以鼠標(biāo)為切入點，根據(jù)下表所提示的信息，用英語寫一篇短文。

　　鼠標(biāo)的必要性對多數(shù)人來說，操作計算機，上網(wǎng)沖浪……

　　鼠標(biāo)的便捷性點擊、移動、插入、拷貝、刪除……編輯文本，搜索信息……

　　收發(fā)郵件，選購商品……

　　點播音樂，下載電影……

　　如果過分依賴鼠標(biāo)…… (請考生結(jié)合自身感受，列舉兩到三點)

　　注意：1.對所給要點逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。2.詞數(shù)150左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計人總詞數(shù)。3.作文中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校和本人姓名。

　　The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

　　For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.

　　A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.

　　【名師點評】

　　本文為提綱式說明文體裁，所選內(nèi)容與我們生活相關(guān)，考生只要把所給要點逐條陳述，適度發(fā)揮，不要逐條翻譯即可。文章說理清楚，語言流暢，句式表達(dá)多樣，用詞恰當(dāng)、準(zhǔn)確。不失為一篇滿分作文。

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　　實現(xiàn)有效的溝通，建立良好的人際關(guān)系，不僅要善于言表，更要學(xué)會傾聽。請你根據(jù)下表中所提供的信息，寫一篇題為“Being a Good Listener” 的英文演講稿。

　　為何傾聽表示尊重，增進(jìn)理解，建立良好的人際關(guān)系

　　誰來傾聽家長傾聽孩子理解孩子，消除代溝，……

　　老師傾聽學(xué)生了解學(xué)生，滿足需求，……

　　同學(xué)相互傾聽增進(jìn)友誼，互幫互學(xué)，……

　　怎樣傾聽(請考生聯(lián)系自己擬定內(nèi)容，列舉兩至三點。)

　　注意：1、 對所給要點，逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。2、 詞數(shù)150左右。開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。3、 演講稿中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校及本人姓名。

　　Good afternoon, everyone.

　　The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.

　　Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.

　　Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

　　What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

　　Thank you for your listening!

　　【名師點評】

　　這是一篇感情真摯、熱情洋溢的演講稿，文中大量運用排比句型，不但準(zhǔn)確流暢地表達(dá)出題目中所提供的信息，而且體現(xiàn)出作者熟練運用英語的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同結(jié)構(gòu)的復(fù)合句式，將傾聽的對象及其作用闡述得淋漓盡致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句議論應(yīng)如何傾聽，則更進(jìn)一步地增強了這篇演說稿的說服力。

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　　好詞：

　　1.promote v .促進(jìn) 2. interpersonal adj.人際的

　　3. generation gap. 代溝 4. open-minded adj. 虛心的

　　好句：

　　1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

　　同學(xué)之間應(yīng)該互相傾聽，這樣他們可以互相學(xué)習(xí)和幫助，也會形成友誼。

　　評析：復(fù)雜句的組合，被動句的使用。

　　2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.

　　我想強調(diào)的是我們每個人都應(yīng)該更多的傾聽他人。

　　評析：復(fù)合句的使用。

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　　2007年4月29日上午10點到11點，全國億萬學(xué)生陽光體育活動在各地大中小學(xué)校同時進(jìn)行，江蘇省1，100萬學(xué)生積極參與了這項活動。

　　教育部倡導(dǎo)學(xué)生：

　　每天鍛煉一小時

　　健康工作五十年

　　幸福生活一輩子

　　請你根據(jù)以上提示，用英語準(zhǔn)備一份發(fā)言稿，向同學(xué)們講述一下陽光體育活動的有關(guān)情況，并就高三學(xué)生是否需要每天花一小時鍛煉，談?wù)勀愕目捶�及理由�?/p>

　　注意：1、發(fā)言稿應(yīng)包括以上所有信息，要有適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。2、詞數(shù)：120左右。發(fā)言稿的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。3、參考詞匯：陽光體育活動——a national student sports program;教育部——the Ministry of Education

Good afternoon, everyone,

　　The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.

　　The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.

　　In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!

　　Thank you!

　　【名師點評】

　　本文的結(jié)構(gòu)十分明晰，同時句式使用得熟練而準(zhǔn)確。本文分為三段，前兩段敘述，后一段發(fā)表觀點，典型的作文結(jié)構(gòu)。在句式使用上，作者用法多樣，使用了獨立結(jié)構(gòu)和虛擬語氣，十分出彩。復(fù)雜的句式是本文的特點之一。

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　　好詞：

　　1.wage v.發(fā)動;2.aim v.瞄準(zhǔn);3. advocate v.提倡

　　好句：

　　1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.

　　教育部提倡我們每天做一個小時的運動，能夠健康地活50年。

　　評析：advocate，其后接虛擬語氣，可以省略情態(tài)動詞。

　　2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.

　　如果我們不進(jìn)行運動，我們的學(xué)習(xí)成績就不會很好。

　　評析：虛擬語氣。

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　　假定你是李華，從小喜愛大熊貓(panda),一直通過有關(guān)網(wǎng)站(website)關(guān)注三年前在美國圣迭哥動物園出生的大熊貓“蘇琳”和她的母親“白云”。現(xiàn)在蘇琳即將三歲。請根據(jù)以下要點給動物園工作人員寫一封信：

　　1、 自我介紹; 2、祝賀蘇琳生日; 3、感謝工作人員; 4、索取蘇琳三歲生日照。

　　注意：1、詞數(shù)100左右;2、可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫;3、開頭語已為你寫好。

Dear Sir/Madam,

　　Greetings from China!

　　I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.

　　Yours truly,

　　Li Hua

　　【名師點評】

　　本文寫作的內(nèi)容要點如下：1.自我介紹;2.信息來源;3.祝賀生日;4.感謝照顧;5.索取照片;6.合適的結(jié)尾。

　　這封信格式正確，行文規(guī)范，描述有條不紊，稱呼、正文中的開頭及結(jié)尾、結(jié)束語均表達(dá)到位。文章行文活潑，感情真摯，語言表述準(zhǔn)確，洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對美方人員的感激之情，以及希望自己愿望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。長短句運用合理，結(jié)合了簡單句和復(fù)合句，流暢自然，不露痕跡，的確是一篇佳作。

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　　好詞：

　　1.delighted adj.欣喜的，快樂的;2.express v.表達(dá);

　　3.give birth to v.產(chǎn)生，生育

　　好句:

　　I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　我祝福它生日快樂并且對你們的辛勤工作表達(dá)我的感激之情，正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國過著幸福和健康的生活。

　　評析：定語從句的使用。

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　　假設(shè)你是卜曼宜，你購買了一部某外國公司生產(chǎn)的手機，因有質(zhì)量問題，要求該公司更換。請根據(jù)下列要點，用英文寫一封電子郵件。

　　要點

　　1. 問題：手機不響鈴，不能發(fā)短信;該產(chǎn)品已售完，無法更換;型號新，無配件，無法維修。

　　2. 要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換。

　　注意：1. 詞數(shù)為100左右;2. 參考詞匯：配件—— spare part;3. 電子郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好(不計入你所寫詞數(shù));4.已給出的電子郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡。

Dear Sir，

　　I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

　　Thank you for your consideration.

　　Sincerely yours,

　　Bu Manyi

　　【名師點評】

　　本文內(nèi)容要點齊全，語言豐富，結(jié)構(gòu)合理，如頭兩句說明了購買手機后發(fā)現(xiàn)故障的情況，中間部分說明了無法維修而必須讓公司更換手機的原委，最后明確提出自己的要求，明白流暢，將題目所提出的要點全部表達(dá)清楚，較好的完成了任務(wù)。全文以一般過去時為基調(diào)，結(jié)合主動語態(tài)與被動語態(tài)，并使用了so, but, therefore 等連接詞，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整嚴(yán)密。固定短語，如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用，使文章的語言顯得地道而精煉。

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　　好詞：

　　1. disappointment n.失望;2.desperate adj.絕望的;

　　3. consideration n.體諒

　　好句：

　　To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

　　令我失望的是，他說因為在中國是新款手機，所以沒有配件來修理。

　　評析：復(fù)雜句的組織; to my disappointment, 常用短語。

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　　一家賓館新開業(yè)，為吸引外國賓客，希望在互聯(lián)網(wǎng)上進(jìn)行宣傳。請你用英語為其 寫一篇文字介紹。主要內(nèi)容包括：

　　1.地點：距白山入口處500米;

　　2.房間及價格：單人間(共20間)，100元/天;雙人間(共15間)，150元/天;熱水淋浴;

　　3.餐飲：餐廳(中、西餐)，咖啡廳(茶、咖啡);

　　4.游泳池：全天免費開放;

　　5.歡迎預(yù)定。

　　注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右，開頭語已為你寫好;2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

　　Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!

　　Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.

　　500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!

　　Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.

　　【名師點評】

　　本文開門見山，首先點明了主旨。本文最大的特點是應(yīng)用了很多比較復(fù)雜的句式，使文章比較出彩。開頭使用了獨立結(jié)構(gòu)交代賓館位置。which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句的使用也很正確�？偟貋碚f，文章句式精煉，是篇不錯的滿分作文。

　　積累卡片英漢互譯

　　好詞：1. provide v.提供;2. convenience n.便利

　　好句：

　　All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.

　　所有這些服務(wù)都會給你帶來便利，并且非常的愉快。

　　評析：bring great convenience，帶來便利。

　　【試題回放】

　　假如你是李華，美國一所友好學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備與你們學(xué)校共同創(chuàng)辦一份中學(xué)生英文刊物，該校格林先生來信詢問有關(guān)情況。請你給她寫封回信，假如你是李華，美國一所友好學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備與你們學(xué)校共同創(chuàng)辦一份中學(xué)生英文刊物，該校格林先生來信詢問有關(guān)情況。

　　請你給她寫封回信，主要內(nèi)容如下：1、表示贊成。2、提出你喜歡的欄目。3、簡要說明理由。

　　注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右。2. 新的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好。3. 適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。4. 參考欄目：欄目—column

Dear Mr. Green,

　　I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.

　　Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.

　　Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!

　　Yours faithfully,

　　Li Hua

　　【名師點評】

　　這是一篇滿分作文。由于這篇作文的出現(xiàn)，導(dǎo)致了安徽省今年的英語作文分?jǐn)?shù)普遍偏低。仔細(xì)分析了這篇文章，寫的的確是好，很地道的美式英語，一些詞語的大膽使用，讓人不得不猜測此人或者是家人可能有過國外生活的經(jīng)歷，否則這么地道標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的英語，可不是一朝一夕所能寫出來的。

　　比如說：my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大膽運用，list, can't wait to 簡直是perfect! 況且文章中沒有一個錯誤，不管是書寫還是語法。英語能夠?qū)W到這種程度，不可謂不讓人佩服。

　　【試題回放】

　　據(jù)報道，7歲的美國女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后處于極度的痛苦之中，美國抗癌協(xié)會(ACS)決定，每當(dāng)Amy收到一封慰問信，就給她增加3美分的治療款。

　　假如你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，請你用英文給Amy寫一封慰問信，主要內(nèi)容包括：自我介紹;得知的情況;表示鼓勵;打算為她做什么;祝她早日康復(fù)。

　　注意：1. 信的格式已為你寫好.2. 信中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實情況。3. 詞數(shù)100左右。4. 請在答題卡上作答。

Dear Amy,

　　I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　【名師點評】

　　本文依照要求，涵蓋了所有要點。文章使用了高中常見的句式，如I?m sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等，都比較好。作者對定語從句的使用恰到好處地修飾了文章，行文自然而通順，值得學(xué)習(xí)。

　　積累卡片

　　好詞：

　　1.realize v.意識到;2.promise v.允諾;

　　3.donate v.捐贈

　　好句：

　　1、I‘m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.

　　我很遺憾地得知你身患肺癌，給你帶來了巨大的痛苦。

　　好處：which引導(dǎo)限制性定語從句。

　　2、So, stand up and fight against the disease!

　　因此，堅強地與疾病做斗爭吧!

　　好處：擲地有聲，語言準(zhǔn)確。

　　假設(shè)你是李華，你的英國筆友Bob將于九月到你所在城市的建新華文學(xué)校學(xué)中文，來信請你在學(xué)校附近為他找一套住房。請根據(jù)圖畫提供的信息，寫信介紹住房的情況，并告知住房面積為25平方米，月租500元。

　　注意：1、詞數(shù)：100左右;2、參考詞匯：房租—Tent(n.).

　　— 1 —

　　I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.

　　Hope you will come here soon!

　　All the best!

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　滿分理由：本文格式正確，意思表述完整，行文流暢自然。作者在寫作過程中注意長短句并用，還使用了以‘which，’引導(dǎo)的非限定性定語從句，從而使文章層次分明，富于變化，不愧為考場佳作。

　　— 2 —

Dear Bob,

　　Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.

　　I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It is on the third floor and there’re three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.

　　Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11 bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the airport,see you.

　　Best wishes !

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　滿分理由：本文格式正確，內(nèi)容完整，表述清楚，銜接緊密流暢，時態(tài)語態(tài)使用準(zhǔn)確，特別是結(jié)尾末段適度的發(fā)揮，既充實了內(nèi)容，又符合邏輯，成為本文與眾不同的亮點。

　　— 3 —

Dear Bob,

　　How are you these days?

　　I’m so glad to know that you’ll come to our city to learn Chinese. You asked me to find a place for you. Now I’ve found one which I think is pretty good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It’s just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.

　　There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you’ll like it. If not, I’ll try to find another place for you.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　滿分理由：本文內(nèi)在邏輯性很強，由遠(yuǎn)及近。由外及內(nèi)，層次分明，錯落有致。同時讓步狀語從句運用得恰到好處，很出彩，再則結(jié)構(gòu)完整，從開頭的問候語到結(jié)尾都很完備。

　　— 4 —

Dear Bob,

　　I’m glad to hear from you.

　　Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you.

　　The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.

　　It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.

　　Will you be satisfied with this flat, or you want another one? Just let me know. I’ll try my best to help you.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　滿分理由：本文內(nèi)容詳實，描述具體細(xì)膩，用詞適當(dāng)準(zhǔn)確，如“suitable house”、“not far from’’等，另外文中的選擇疑問句也很有新意。

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