托福綜合寫(xiě)作點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)與面對(duì)面結(jié)構(gòu)比較
導(dǎo)語(yǔ)：托�？荚噷�(xiě)作部分的第一個(gè)任務(wù)是“Integrated Task”即綜合寫(xiě)作，大部分學(xué)生對(duì)于如何應(yīng)對(duì)綜合寫(xiě)作缺乏相關(guān)的知識(shí)和經(jīng)驗(yàn)，很大程度依賴(lài)于教師的指導(dǎo)，其中一個(gè)重要的方面就是如何安排文章的結(jié)構(gòu)。對(duì)此，ETS并沒(méi)有給出詳細(xì)的官方建議，只是在ETS公開(kāi)的綜合寫(xiě)作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中，給出了5分(即滿(mǎn)分)作文的定義如下：
A response at this level successfully selects the important information from the lecture and coherently and accurately presents this information in relation to the relevant information presented in the reading. The response is well organized, and occasional language errors that are present do not result in inaccurate or imprecise presentation of content or connections.
可以看出，ETS并沒(méi)有規(guī)定一篇綜合寫(xiě)作應(yīng)該使用某種固定的結(jié)構(gòu)模式，而只是從信息點(diǎn)的準(zhǔn)確提煉，信息組織的條理性和語(yǔ)言的準(zhǔn)確性這幾個(gè)角度定義了一篇滿(mǎn)分作文。然而實(shí)踐中，這樣的指導(dǎo)性建議太為籠統(tǒng)。學(xué)生還是期望教師能夠給出一種易于理解的，安全有效的且操作性強(qiáng)的結(jié)構(gòu)，在考試時(shí)依照這個(gè)結(jié)構(gòu)構(gòu)建文章的主體，并以此為基礎(chǔ)填充細(xì)節(jié)，從而快速高效地完成作文。
朗閣海外考試研究中心的老師經(jīng)過(guò)一段時(shí)間的教學(xué)，總結(jié)出兩種適合新托福綜合寫(xiě)作的結(jié)構(gòu)安排，為了形象理解，稱(chēng)為“點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)”型和“面對(duì)面”型的結(jié)構(gòu)，本文就將對(duì)這兩種結(jié)構(gòu)進(jìn)行分析和比較。
一、“點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)”的結(jié)構(gòu)
“點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)”的結(jié)構(gòu)指的是把綜合寫(xiě)作中的閱讀材料和聽(tīng)力材料的每一個(gè)對(duì)應(yīng)點(diǎn)都單獨(dú)提煉出來(lái)用一個(gè)段落加以闡述。這種結(jié)構(gòu)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)是可以把閱讀文章和聽(tīng)力材料的對(duì)應(yīng)關(guān)系更細(xì)致地進(jìn)行說(shuō)明，使文章層次感強(qiáng)，同時(shí)反映出考生提煉信息和對(duì)比信息的能力更高。比如下面的一篇范文就是ETS給出的滿(mǎn)分作文，是一篇典型的“點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)”型的.結(jié)構(gòu)安排方式。
可以看出，“點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)”和“面對(duì)面”的結(jié)構(gòu)有各自的特點(diǎn)，但總得來(lái)說(shuō)“點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)”的結(jié)構(gòu)在“對(duì)比型”的新托福綜合寫(xiě)作中要更適用一些，因?yàn)樗馨衙茳c(diǎn)逐一呈現(xiàn)，更細(xì)致地體現(xiàn)了聽(tīng)力和閱讀材料之間的關(guān)系。但掌握“面對(duì)面”的結(jié)構(gòu)也很有必要，因?yàn)樗梢赃m用一些聽(tīng)力和閱讀材料之間的關(guān)系是一致、延伸或解釋型的考題。此外，在考生無(wú)法尋找到所有的對(duì)應(yīng)點(diǎn)時(shí)，用“面對(duì)面”的結(jié)構(gòu)也算是一種補(bǔ)救措施。
附：托福綜合寫(xiě)作sample answer 兩篇，針對(duì)的是同一個(gè)考題，第一篇用的是“點(diǎn)對(duì)點(diǎn)”結(jié)構(gòu)，第二篇用的是“面對(duì)面”的結(jié)構(gòu)。
Sample answer 1
Urban sprawl is defined as the growth of cities in an unplanned manner, spreading outward rather than upward. Although urban sprawl brings some positive influence to our lives such as new homes and businesses, better schools, less noise and crime, etc., many people, especially environmental campaigners, see it as harmful to human life and the nature, as it robs people of nature, wiping out parks and farmland, and also brings traffic congestion to roads linking cities and suburbs.
The New Urbanism movement is designed to address urban sprawl, and communities such as Celebration in Florida, which is constructed applying New Urbanism principals, have proved very effective in solving this problem. The first principle of New Urbanism is to provide effective transportation system and environmental protection. To achieve this, the town of Celebration has a large area of greenbelt dedicated to wildlife preservation. It also has buildings that are environmentally friendly and energy-efficient. New Urbanism’s second principle is to provide housing and jobs that are close together. This is reflected in Celebration’s office and apartment buildings which are all densely constructed in a small area to avoid sprawling. Finally, New Urbanism requires neighborhoods to have both single and multi-family residences, and this is exactly what can be seen in the town of Celebration, where residents live close together and find it easy to socialize.
Urban sprawl is low-density, outward growth and mostly single-family residences. Its negative effects are robbing us of our nature and having us meeting traffic jams between cities and suburbs, while its positive effects are providing home construction, new business and better schools, making less noise and causing less crime.
Sample Answer 2
New urbanism has emerged to solve the problem of urban sprawl. Regions have to create transportation systems and environmental protection; Cities need to offer housing and jobs that are close together; Neighborhoods should have single- and multi-family housing where residence can walk to stores, public transportation and parks.
Take the community of Celebration for example. It meets the goal of social and civic interaction by setting up a central market street district and housing including single- and multi-family residences. It also meets the goal of environment preservation with its good environmentally-friendly town design, and with high-rise offices and apartment buildings which help reduce the population density.
New urbanism like celebration will bring new changes to urban sprawl.