名師點(diǎn)撥：雅思習(xí)作修改及評(píng)分建議及改進(jìn)策略
題目：It seems that with the increase in use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people prefer to write letters. Will letters disappear completely?
審題：本文可以看作是agree or disagree 類文章，要求考生能在開(kāi)頭段表明自己的.立場(chǎng)。探討的兩個(gè)主題是：信件 VS手機(jī)電腦。
這篇習(xí)作的學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作框架是3773，觀點(diǎn)是信不會(huì)被取代，中間寫(xiě)兩段，第一段探討手機(jī)電腦的兩個(gè)好處，第二段探討信的四個(gè)好處，最后總結(jié)信的優(yōu)點(diǎn)多，繼續(xù)推行。
開(kāi)頭段：
Mobile phones and E-mails are increasingly playing 1pivital roles in our daily life in this day and age. Yet at the same time, whether 2letter will disappear has sparked heated debate. As far as I am concerned, 3it is impossible for letters to be replaced。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：首段格式清楚，略微有模板的印記，但是有拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。會(huì)讓考官覺(jué)得是6分或以下的水平。
修改：
1 pivotal 其他重要：essential, indispensable, vital
2 Yet at the same time, whether letters will be replaced by phones and emails has sparked heated debate
3 原文impossible太過(guò)絕對(duì)。Hardly will letters fade out。
中間第一段：
On the one hand, it is arguable that those high-technology products can bring about numerous benefits。
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