大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文范文及點(diǎn)評(píng):食品安全
題目：食品安全
Food Safety
要求：1 食品安全問(wèn)題令人擔(dān)憂。
2 對(duì)此，你有什么看法?
參考范文:
Currently, many problems concerning the safety of food have popped up. As for me, I believe at least three factors account for this issue.
First, I observe that profits drive many food producers to commit illegal things. They aim to gain more money at the expense of consumers health. Second, the overuse of agricultural pesticide has resulted in the degradation of food quality. The excessive pesticide bears enormous health hazard for people. Furthermore, some food producers inject hormones into domestic animals so as to make them grow more quickly and thus they can turn in more profit. As a result, peoples health has been seriously disturbed.
All in all, food safety is such a great concern, and we all should do establish laws and implement them effectively to avoid producing toxic foods.
點(diǎn)評(píng)：首句直接點(diǎn)題，詞組pop up指彈起，這里指食品安全突然間成了一大社會(huì)問(wèn)題。
文章第二部分從蔬菜生產(chǎn)商、水果濫用農(nóng)藥及激素方面闡釋了食品安全問(wèn)題的根源。Observe除了有觀察之意，還可以表示某人的`觀點(diǎn);動(dòng)詞commit后面通常接違法或傷害性的事情，如commit a crime, commit illegal things, commit suicide等等。以消費(fèi)者的健康為代價(jià)除了使用at the expense of 還可以使用at the cost of 或者ignoring。另外，在表達(dá)同一意思或相近意思時(shí)，此文避免了一詞多用，而是采用不同的單詞或詞組，如劣質(zhì)食品使用了problems concerning the safety of food, the degradation of food quality和toxic foods。
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