寫作時(shí)要用簡(jiǎn)潔明了的語言避免不必要的詞語，如果一個(gè)句子中包含兩個(gè)或兩個(gè)以上獨(dú)立分句要用連接詞連接，高考英語作文寫作基椽英語寫作中句子的表達(dá)，顯然把句子寫連貫這是指寫幾句話又叫句群來說的。
寫作訓(xùn)練一_寫句子
一、避免誤置修飾語：
誤置修飾語是一個(gè)用作修飾語的詞或詞組，因?yàn)闆]有靠近它所修飾的詞，結(jié)果使意義模糊不清或改變了句子的意思。
*修改下面的句子，注意誤置修飾語的錯(cuò)誤。
1AttheageofsixmyfatherbegantoteachmeEnglish.
2Ialmostgotgoodmarksineverysubject.
3Indespairwecouldimaginewhatanordinarymanwoulddo.
4Thegirlismyfriendwhomyoumetatthepartyyesterday.
5Themoneywasputintheboxwhichfathergaveme.
6Youwillenjoylookingatthepicturesthatyoutookyearslater.
7Therewasaspotonhernewdrethatcouldnotberemoved.
8Sheputthesandwichesbackinthebagthatshehadnoteaten.
9WithloveandcareIrealizedmyparentsraisedmethebestwaytheycould.
10Isawthatthemurdererhadbeencaughtintheeveningpaper.
二、邏輯主語一致問題：
注意分詞、動(dòng)名詞、不定式及某些形容詞短語的邏輯主語應(yīng)與句子的主語一致。*修改以下句子：
1Comingoutoftheclassroom,myheartwasbeatingveryfast.
2Lookingdownthevalley,smokecameup.
3Tobewell-informed,readingnewspapersisagoodhabit.
4Lyingthereonthebeachinthesun,schoolworkdidn’tseemimportant.
5Soundasleepinthelivingroom,Icameacromygrandfather.
6Whentenyearsold,mymothergavemearing.
7Apologeticallythefoodwasplacebeforeus.
8Becauseofgoingtotoomanyparties,mytermpaperwaslate.
9Tooexcitedtoeat,theletterwasreadoverandover.
10Readytostart,thebuswasinfrontofthebuildingwaitingforus.
11Dressedinblue,motherthoughtthelittlegirllookedprettier.
三、避免人稱代詞的混淆：
整篇文章宜使用固定的代詞，以第一人稱敘述的文章不能轉(zhuǎn)成第二人稱。用第三人稱敘述的文章就不能轉(zhuǎn)用第一或第二人稱。
*修改下面用錯(cuò)的代詞：
1Beforeoperatingthemachine,oneshouldreaddirectionscarefully.Otherwiseyoumayhave
anexplosion.
2Veryfewpeoplecangetasmuchenjoymentoutofmodernartastheycould.Oneneednotbe
anartisttogetsomefunoutofpainting.Nordoyouneedtobeveryartistic.
3Wehadbeenontheplanetforeighteenhours,andyougetprettytiredofsittingthatlong.
四、避免冗長(zhǎng)累贅：
寫作時(shí)要用簡(jiǎn)潔明了的語言，避免不必要的詞語。
*將下列句子用簡(jiǎn)潔的語言表述：
1PersonallyIthinkheisagoodstudent.
2Shehelpedtheoldmantositdowninthearmchair.
3IseldomgototheShanghaiLibraryduetothereasonthatitisfarawayfrommyhome.
4Ihaveletimethanmyfellowworkers,forIamthedaughterofmymotherwhoisseventy
andinpoorhealthandthemotherofmylittleson.
5Iimmediatelysenthimoutofthehousetohospital.
五、正確使用連接詞，表示較為復(fù)雜的意思：
如果一個(gè)句子中包含兩個(gè)或兩個(gè)以上獨(dú)立分句，要用連接詞連接。不要把nevertheless,however,therefore等副詞誤認(rèn)為連接詞用。
*用合適的連接詞把下面每一題中的兩句話連起來：
1Springhascome.Everythingiscomingbacktolife.
2Iwantedtorun.Whereto?
3IsawMr.Smithtalkingwithsomeofthestudentsintheroom.Ididn’tenter.
4Takethemapwithyou.Youwillbelost.
5Heheardaloudnoiseinthehallway.Herushedout.
6Youwillgothere.Theywillcomehere.
7Themandidaverygoodrepairjob.Hechargedverylittle.
8Ididn’twritetohim.Ididn’tcallhim.
9Sheisfamousforherpaintings.Sheisfamousforhernovels,too.
10Itmusthaverainedlastnight.Thegroundiswetinthemorning.
11Thechildwassick.Hedidn’tgotoschool.
12GivethebooktoTom.Youmayreaditfirst.
六、盡量避免漢語干擾造成的錯(cuò)誤
*根據(jù)漢語意思修改句子：
1Thebooksinourlibraryaregettingmoreandmore.（書越來越多）
2Shedidnotjoininthegame.Evenshedidnotspeaktoanyofthem.（甚至她…）
3Weveryappreciatetheirkindness.（非常感謝）
4Anyonewhogoesagainstthelawcannotescapefrombeingpunished.（任何人…都不）
5Nomatterhow,Iwilldomybestintheexam.（不管怎樣）
6Sothatwemustmakegreateffortstodoourworkwell.（因此）
7Ialmostcouldnotmovewithsomanyclotheson.（幾乎動(dòng)彈不得）
8Thereisayoungmanwantstoseeyoudownstairs.（有人要…）
9Manyfamilieshaveonlyonechild.（許多…只有一個(gè)…）
10Ourteacherwasgladthatwealmostpassedtheexam.（差不多全部）
11DuringstayinginBeijing,Ivisitedalotofplacesofinterest.（在…期間）
12Iwonderhowoldherageis.（她年紀(jì)有多大）
13Facedwithsomanygoods,Ididn’tknowwhattobuy.（不知買什么）
14MothermademenotwatchanyTVforlong.（不讓我看電視）
151617181920212223242526272829303132Iwillnotforgetmydearfriendsforever.（永遠(yuǎn)不忘記）Wearealwaysnotlateforclass.（總不）Wecouldnotfindthemissingboyeverywhere.（到處都不）Thatnovelisveryworthreading.（很值得）InShanghaiweenjoyconvenienttraffic.（便利的交通）Sheaskedmehowmuchthepriceofthevasewas.（價(jià)格多少）Hisillnedoesn’tmatter.（不要緊）Weknowthatthemooncirclesroundtheearth.（圍繞著…轉(zhuǎn)）Inmyopinion,Ithinkweshouldaskthemforadvice.（以我看，我認(rèn)為）Istillcontactwithmychildhoodfriendsnow.（和…聯(lián)系）Theywillcometovisityouwhenyouareconvenient.（你方便的時(shí)候）Iwillreadbooksasmuchaspossibleduringtheholiday.（盡可能多）Thisyearmystudieswillbeverybusy.（學(xué)校很忙）Hesaidhehadabusystudyinglifeatschool.（繁忙的學(xué)習(xí)生活）Ididn’tknowhowIshoulddo.（該怎么辦）Facedwithsomanystrangers,Iwasn’tabletoexpress.（不會(huì)表達(dá)）Itookanactivepartinmystudies.（積極參加學(xué)習(xí)）Hesaidthathemaybewouldcomebacknextweek.（他可能會(huì)）
2016高考英語寫作講解與訓(xùn)練--作文寫作基礎(chǔ)(寫作中句子的表達(dá))
高考英語作文寫作基椽—英語寫作中句子的表達(dá)
一.教學(xué)內(nèi)容：
英語寫作中句子的表達(dá)
高考英語書面表達(dá)要求內(nèi)容充實(shí)，句式豐富，用詞準(zhǔn)確，行文連貫，思路清晰，過渡自然。要想達(dá)到這一目的，句子的正確運(yùn)用和表達(dá)是至關(guān)重要的。高考書面表達(dá)不僅要求學(xué)生正確運(yùn)用語法規(guī)則，即結(jié)構(gòu)完整，主謂一致，時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)準(zhǔn)確，還要有效的使用并列、轉(zhuǎn)折、遞進(jìn)、因果、比較等表達(dá)方式，同時(shí)“運(yùn)用較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯”進(jìn)行表達(dá)。
［學(xué)習(xí)過程］
一.句子的基本結(jié)構(gòu)和表達(dá)方式
1.簡(jiǎn)單句
Earlyinthemorning,wesetoutattheschoolgate.
TheInternetisbecomingmoreandmoreimportantinourdailylife.
MuchofCanadaiscoveredbyforests,butinChinatheareaofforestismuchless.
Wecansende-mailsanywhereatanytimeandgetthelatestinformationthroughInternet.
2.復(fù)合句
（1）狀語從句
Thecarhitthemanwhenhewascrossingthestreet.（時(shí)間）
Assoonaswegottothecampsite,westartedtoputupthetentandcookfood.
WhereverIam,Iwillbethinkingofyou.（地點(diǎn)）
Shetooksomebookswithhersothatshewouldgetboredduringthelongjourney.（目的）Aslongaswedon’tloseheart,wewillfindawaytoovercomethedifficulty.（條件）Althoughitisdifficult,wewilltryourbesttofinishitontime.(讓步)
（2）定語從句
YuanLongping,whoisapioneerofagriculture，iscalled“thefatherofrice”.
WechoseBeijingWorldParkasourdestination,whichliesinFengtaiinthesouthwestofBeijing.
（3）名詞性從句
Wherewearegoingthisweekendhasn’tbeendecided.(主語從句)
Myideaisthatweshouldsticktoouroriginalplan.（表語從句）
Thefactthattheearthisseriouslypollutediswell-known.（同位語從句）
Idon’tknowwhetherTomwillcometothepartytonight（賓語從句）
（4）非謂語動(dòng)詞
Surroundedbyavarietyofbuildings,wefoundourselvesdeeplyabsorbedinthesight.
Welefttheparkfeelingjoyful.
HavinggraduatedfromSouthwestAgricultureCollegein1953,hedevotedtofindingwaystogrowmorerice.
Itisunnecessarytoarguewithhimaboutit.
Thebookexplainshowtosolvetheproblem.
3．固定搭配的結(jié)構(gòu)
Itwasthisparkthatwasfullofhistoryandfun.（強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)）
AsthedestinationislocatedinFengtaiinthesouthwestofBeijing,wehadtospendonehourandahalfgettingtherebybus.Uponarrival,wevisitedLincolnMemorial.
WewenttoBeijingWorldPark,whichliesinFengtaiinthesouthwestofBeijing,inordertoseetheworld-famousarchitecture.
YuanLongpingisknownasapioneerofagriculture.
Walkingthroughtheparkwasafeastfortheeyes.
Thewholeworldcouldbenefitfromhiswork.
Hisgreatcontributiontoagricultureisofgreatimportance..
Insteadofbeingsatisfiedwithhiswork,hewasdrivenbyastrongdesiretocontinuetodevelophisrice.
Forhisgreatachievement,hewashonoredbyChinesegovernment.
二.英文寫作中常見錯(cuò)誤句型分析
1.粘連句
Beijingisabeautifulcity,Ienjoylivinghere.
2.句子結(jié)構(gòu)不完整
Therearemanypeopleagreetokeeppetsathome.
Althoughpetsmaypollutetheenvironment.
3.不平衡結(jié)構(gòu)
Thenewhouseislarge,beautifulandhasenoughroomsforpeopletolivein.
Thereisagreatdifferentbetweendiningoutandtohaveasnackathome.
4.懸空修飾
ComparingwithZhongguancun,SiliconValleyisfarmoredeveloped.
Tofinishthetaskperfectly,morepracticeshouldbedoneahead.
5．漢語式英語
WhowillinsteadofMiGreen?
Weallagainstallkindsofterroristsactivities.
Therewere20peoplediedinthecaraccident.
Don’tworry.Yourbodywillgetwellsoon.
Iwasverygladtohearfromherletter.
Thefilmhadbegunfor5minuteswhenIgottothetheatre.
Thewesternpartofthecityrainedheavilyyesterdayevening.
Ourschoolhavetakenplacegreatchanges.
WelcomeyoutovisitBeijing.
三.寫作中常用的句型結(jié)構(gòu)
1.Heworkedveryhardinordertoachievehisgoal.
2.Havingwalkedthewholeday,weweresotiredthatwecoulddonothingbutsleep.
3.Nomatterwhatproblemhefaces,henevergivesup.
4.Itistoolongajourneytomakeinonedaybycar.
5.You’dbetterstartbyintroducingyourself.
6.Tompreferstostayuplatetofinishtheworkratherthanleaveitdonethenextday.
7.Forestscannotonlyfreshtheairbutalsoreducenoises.
8.YoucouldeitherbuyanMP3orgotoYunnanforavisitifyoupatheexam.
9.Heissuchaboringmanthathelikesneitherentertainmentnorlearning.
10.Footballaswellascomputergamesispopularwithyoungpeople.
11.Everyoneisbusyintheclassroom.Somearereading,othersarewriting.
12.Beijinghasapopulationof13million,makingitoneofthelargestcitiesinChina.
13.Thedistancefromeasttowestisover5,500kilometersandthecountrycovers6oftheworld’s24timezones.
14.Ididn’tknowthetruthuntilshetoldmewhathadhappened.
15.Itisnogoodtalkingwithoutthinkingcarefully.
16.Peoplefinditimportanttohavesomeworkingexperience.
17.ItistenyearssinceImethimlasttime.
18.Itwon’tbelongbeforewegraduatefromthisschool.
19.ItisconvenientforustobeabletogetlotsofinformationthroughInternet.
20.Ittookusquitesometimetocollectsomuchinformation.
21.It’stimeforustoleavethepark.
22.Itisfriendshipthatwevaluemost.
23.Itistimethatwedidsomethingtoprotecttheenvironment.
24.Theybelieveittheirdutytohelpthoseinneed.
25.Itissaidthatmorechanceswillbegiventothestudents.
26.ItisknowntoallthatChinaisacountrywithalonghistory.
27.Asisknowntoall,the29thOlympicGameswillbeheldinBeijingin2016.
28.Whatexcitedmemostgreatlywasthatmynovelhadbeenpublished.
29.Thereisabeautifulgirllivinginthesmallvillageatthefootofthemountain.
30.ThereasonwhyIwaslatewasthatIcaughtinthetrafficjamthismorning.
31.Thereusedtobealibrary,butnowithasbeentorndown.
32.Thereisnodoubtwhetherheisfitforthejob.
33.Tomygreatsurprise,hemanagedtocompletethetaskonlyinacoupleofdays.
34.Ihadarolloffilmdevelopedlastweek.
35.Thankstoourefforts,everythingisgoingsmoothly.
36.I’mnotsurewhenIsawherlast.
37.Butfortherain,weshouldhavehadapleasantjourney.
38.Iwasabouttogooutwhenthetelephonerang.
39.Somepeoplewastefoodwhileothersdon’thaveenough.
40.Hewassotiredthathefellasleepwithhisshoeson.
41.Onceyouarehere,listentoyourteacher’sinstructions.
42.ThepopulationinandaroundSanFranciscoisnowtentimesmorethanitwasin1906.
43.ThemoreyoupracticeEnglish,theeasieritbecomes.
44.TheChinesedietisconsideredtobethehealthiestintheworld.
http://emrowgh.com lephonesplayanimportantroleinourdailylife.
46.Besideshisworkinphysics,hespentalotoftimeworkingforhumanrightsandprogress.
47.Insteadofgoingtothebank,theywilluseacomputerandatelephonetochangemoneyandtopaytheirelectricitybillsandsoon.
48.Thatisbecausethisprofessorhasdiseasewhichpreventshimfromspeaking.
49.Althoughmanyfamiliesbecameseparated,peoplestillkeptintouchwitheachother.
50.ChinaDailyhasallusualsectionsofnewspaper,includingHomeNews,InternationalNews,BusineNewsandSportsnews.
寫作訓(xùn)練：學(xué)會(huì)把句子寫連貫
寫作訓(xùn)練：學(xué)會(huì)把句子寫連貫
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寫作訓(xùn)練：學(xué)會(huì)把句子寫連貫
連貫，也可以說成“聯(lián)貫”，即句子之間連接貫通。顯然，把句子寫連貫，這是指寫幾句話（又叫“句群”）來說的。翻開同學(xué)們的作文本，段落中上下句不連貫的現(xiàn)象是比較普遍存在的，主要表現(xiàn)在：句子之間無順序，承接不緊密，跨度大；上下句之間，被描述的對(duì)象（即“主語”）重復(fù)出現(xiàn)，不會(huì)運(yùn)用“他（她）”，或者“它”這些人稱代詞。
怎樣才能做到把句子寫連貫?zāi)兀?/p>
（1）合理安排順序，使句子連貫。有順序，這是寫幾句意思連貫的話的最基本的要求。這就要求我們?cè)趯憥拙湓挄r(shí)，一定不能東一句、西一句，想到哪兒就寫到哪兒；總要圍繞既定的中心意思，按照一定的順序，把相關(guān)的句子組織在一起，使句子前后連貫。如：按照事情發(fā)展的先后順序排列句子；按照時(shí)間先后的次序排列句子；按照空間位置換（上→下、下→上，里→外、外→內(nèi)，前→后、后→前，左→右、右→左，近→遠(yuǎn)、遠(yuǎn)→近，??）順序排列句子；按照事物的不同類別或同一事物的不同方面的順序排列句子；按照“總→分”或“分→總”的順序排列句子；按照“概括→具體”或“具體→概括”的順序排列句子；按照“因→果”或“果→因”的順序排列句子；??當(dāng)然有時(shí)候還可以把兩種或幾種“順序”綜合起來使用。
大家讀讀下面這幾句話，想想是按什么順序排列的：雨越下越大。我透過玻璃窗向外望去，天地間像掛著無比寬大的珠簾，迷蒙蒙的一片。雨落在對(duì)面屋頂?shù)耐咂希瑸R起一朵朵水花，像一層薄煙籠罩在屋頂上。雨水順著房檐流下來，開始像斷了線的珠子，漸漸地連成一條線。地上的水越來越多，匯合成一條條小溪。這幾句話，先“總”寫雨大，再具體“分述”雨怎樣大，大到什么程度。在具體“分述”時(shí)，又是按照“天地間→對(duì)面屋頂→房檐→地上”的順序排列的。這幾句話寫得多么清楚、連貫��！
（2）學(xué)會(huì)運(yùn)用“他（她）”或“它”這些人稱代詞，使句子連貫。讀讀下面這幾句話，想想有什么毛病，怎樣說才好：媽媽的衣袖破了。媽媽趕忙從抽屜里拿出一個(gè)小布包。媽媽先從布包里拿出一根針，一條青線，用牙咬了咬
線頭兒，把線頭兒穿過針眼兒。媽媽又從布包里找出一小塊布，貼在破了的地方，然后一針一線地縫起來。
讀后，大家一定發(fā)現(xiàn)：這幾句話寫的對(duì)象是媽媽，主要寫的是媽媽縫補(bǔ)衣服時(shí)所做的準(zhǔn)備工作，是按事情經(jīng)過的先后順序排列的。只是由于這四句話的開頭重復(fù)出現(xiàn)“媽媽”一詞，因此讀起來顯得很拗口。如果把后面三句開頭中的“媽媽”改成“她”字，這幾句話就連貫多了。這就告訴我們：在幾個(gè)句子里，如果寫的只是一個(gè)人物（或事物），后面再指這個(gè)人物（或事物）時(shí)，就可以用“他（她）”或“它”來代替。
【思考練習(xí)】
（1）句子連貫指的是什么？怎樣寫幾句意思連貫的話？
（2）圍繞“雪越下越大”（或“洗手帕”、“刷鞋”）這一內(nèi)容，寫幾句意思連貫的話。